错误的雅思写作开头示例

雅思写作一直是考生听见就头疼的科目，众多考生为了拿到高分而努力着。不过错误的雅思写作开头你还在用吗，小编就为大家列出哪些是考官看见就会扣分的开头，各位考生一起来看看你占了多少吧。

1. 中式英文

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Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

In our life， there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

Topic 2- The population problem

The population problem is a very big problem。 For example， in the city centers of Shanghai， we can always see people mountain people sea there。

Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?

I think in today’s society， there is no fairness in the business world。 For example， I always chopped when I go out buy things……

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

Being a nice person have many advantage。 I believe if a people always do bad things， he will get “baoying”。

2.绕半天说不到重点

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Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?

This topic is very interesting。 I’m very interested in talking about this topic。 Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

修改方案：开门见山 直奔主题

In my opinion， it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。

Topic 2-Will modern technology， such as the Internet， ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?

Ok， this topic is a very good topic。 First， let me tell you a story： I have a friend， he likes go on the internet very much。 Every day， he uses internet to read news or play internet games。 So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life。

Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

Oh， this topic is surely very important。 Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!

3. 语法严重错误

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Topic-If children behave badly， should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?

About this problem， my think is if children behave badly， then parents are not right。 Because teach child is parent’s responsibility。 So we also punish parents too besides children is also should。

4. 观点模糊态度暧昧

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Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think this topic is very hard to say。 Because I am still very little， only 17， and not married， so this topic is very difficult for me……

5. 偏离主题无轨电车

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Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education。 To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

I think to success， we must have a lot of important qualities。 To have these important qualities， we must learn a lot of things， for example， English， music tools， and etc。 We can learn these qualities from our teachers， our friends and from books。 All in all， we can learn from many places。